Imprisoned in his mind

Here is the latest entry for the 3 word Wednesday category. The previous entry was for last week’s 3ww 🙂

He long did ignore, his deeds from before
But it did not take long, for karma to unfold
He fell so deep beneath within his own gaze
as cruelty smirked on, completely unfazed

The horrifying fears did taketh shape
They did all and more, than he could take
Self inflicted pain and misery seemed loyal
But happiness? So rusty and rickety, unoiled

And so he waits on his angel of fate
Yearning weightlessness along her pure wings
Dying every moment in her thoughts, her dreams
As soundness derailed – beckoning insanity’s spate


12 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. ThomG
    May 13, 2010 @ 00:15:03

    This has weight to it, a heftiness that plays well with the subject matter.

    Oh, do me a favor, use Mr. Linky so people can find your link without going into the commnents.


  2. Teal
    May 13, 2010 @ 09:05:36

    @ThomG : Thank you 🙂


  3. Tim Remp
    May 13, 2010 @ 21:19:13

    Very well crafted. I loved ‘Dying every moment in her thoughts’



  4. Vivek
    May 14, 2010 @ 22:45:09

    Agree with ThomG on the heftiness.

    And the last stanza-such fatalism there!


  5. Teal
    May 14, 2010 @ 23:04:17

    @Vivek : Thank you 🙂


  6. Toi
    May 16, 2010 @ 07:30:46

    gorgeous and yearning…i feel for him… the
    waiting…oh my gosh the waiting. love.


  7. Teal
    May 16, 2010 @ 08:09:18

    @Toi : Thank you so much 🙂


  8. Teal
    May 16, 2010 @ 23:45:40

    @ Tim:
    Thanks a lot 😀


  9. Dee
    May 17, 2010 @ 02:53:22

    “yearning weightlessness along her pure wings” love that line 🙂


  10. Andy Sewina
    May 17, 2010 @ 04:08:04

    Nicely worded, and I love the bit about being so rusty rickety and unoiled!


  11. pieceofpie
    May 18, 2010 @ 01:49:04

    the weight of one’s actions can be long coming… or perhaps rescued from self is possible


  12. Teal
    May 18, 2010 @ 10:06:08

    @pieceofpie : Rightly said – what goes around, comes around.


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