God’s blunder


Here goes my first ever entry for the monday potluck at the JinglePoetry page 🙂

As I stand in awe at the citadel up front
My mind , it heads into a dizzy trance
How can the hands of man, herald such wonder?
How can we let it die – and do blunder after blunder

The ruins of a once impermeable fort it was
The one abandoned, rival faith, was the cause
As the guide rambled on, the crowd walked along
But I stood my ground and suddely, heard a voice so profound

As I turned to the source of the voice
A ghostly apparition, it appeared
“My child, Why?, is the question, you wonder?
But dont you know – Mankind, is god’s blunder.”

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10 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Shashi
    Nov 01, 2010 @ 18:55:29

    Dear Teal

    Its very nice.. and I enjoyed it.
    Thanks for sharing…

    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya
    Twitter: @VerseEveryDay
    Blog: http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com

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  2. Jingle
    Nov 01, 2010 @ 19:59:56

    As I turned to the source of the voice
    A ghostly apparition, it appeared
    “My child, Why?, is the question, you wonder?
    But dont you know – Mankind, is god’s blunder.”

    well done,
    love your way to nailing it.

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  3. Jessicas Japes
    Nov 01, 2010 @ 20:43:09

    Cute ending, well lead up to. The sort of poem I like to reread.

    http://jessicasjapes.wordpress.com/2010/11/01/halloween-fright/

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  4. fiveloaf
    Nov 01, 2010 @ 21:08:42

    nice message- man is gods blunder hmm.. agree!

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  5. Eric
    Nov 01, 2010 @ 23:19:50

    Yes, and animals were his 2nd blunder. That’s why people are imperfect: We’re made in his image! (LOL!)

    Nice Potluck entry, Teal.

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  6. Eric
    Nov 01, 2010 @ 23:20:08

    (Actually, I think God is Man’s blunder)

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  7. Reflections
    Nov 01, 2010 @ 23:59:11

    Love this, nice first entry.

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  8. nimaruichi
    Nov 02, 2010 @ 17:01:37

    ‘…Mankind, is god’s blunder.’
    maybe you’re right…

    ‘…God is Man’s blunder’
    maybe Eric’s right as well, 🙂

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  9. Reflections
    Nov 02, 2010 @ 18:12:13

    Love the last stanza… mankind is definitely a blunder… but then he did give us free choice as part of his plan…. Oh, but for the apple.

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  10. Jingle
    Nov 03, 2010 @ 19:40:54

    Please help giving (belated) birthday wishes to 3 or 4 fellow poets:

    http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/2010/11/03/happy-birthday-eric-dom/

    Thanks a lot for the support.
    Happy November!
    Your presence adds light to our space, keep shining!
    xxx

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